Hello, I wrote this song in English, this is also not my first mother language so any changes someone made will be much appreciated, I think it's pretty simple to understand just maybe I have some grammar problem or it could be maybe with better words.

You're made of my love
I can feel you exist
You are my bright light
And I wanted you to shine
You will live among stars
And I will know you are there
And the sky that gave you shelter
Will be forever in my heart

This I wrote for my unborn child. I want it to be in gaelic because I see that language as connection to other world. And I want to have this and remember this.

Thank you in advance, this is bad period of my life where I run to write and go away from the world.

Hi. Welcome to the forum. I'm very sorry for your loss.

I apologise that your request hasn't been dealt with sooner. I am behind in checking the forum and only just found your post among the unanswered ones.

Perhaps:

De mo ghrá a rinne mé thú "You're made of my love" literally "Of my love I made you"
Mothaím go bhfuil tú ann "I can feel you exist"
Is tusa mo shoilse gheal "You are my bright light"
Agus ba mhian liom go lonrófá "And I wanted you to shine"
Mairfidh tú i measc na réaltaí "You will live among stars"
Agus beidh a fhios agam go bhfuil tú ann "And I will know you are there"
Agus an spéir a thug dídean dhuit "And the sky that gave you shelter"
Beidh sí i mo chroí go deo "Will be forever in my heart"

Await correction or confirmation ...

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Múinteoir Gaeilge - Irish Teacher
My "specialty" is Connemara Irish, particularly Cois Fhairrge dialect, but I can also speak Ulster and Munster Irish with native-level pronunciation.
Is fearr Gaeilge ḃriste ná Béarla cliste, cinnte, aċ i ḃfad níos fearr aríst í Gaeilge ḃinn ḃeo na nGaeltaċtaí.
Gaeilge Chonnacht (GC), go háraid Gaeilge Chois Fhairrge (GCF), Gaeilic Uladh (GU), Gaelainn na Mumhan (GM), agus Gaeilge an Chaighdeáin Oifigiúil (CO).

Sorry for your loss Pendragon. And as a moderator I'm sorry too that your post was overlooked for so long.




Why not use "solas" Breandán?

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No real reason. Soilse kind of feels more abstract and solas more concrete, but I was in two minds between the two anyway, so I am more than happy to change it:

De mo ghrá a rinne mé thú "You're made of my love" literally "Of my love I made you"
Mothaím go bhfuil tú ann "I can feel you exist"
Is tusa mo sholas geal "You are my bright light"
Agus ba mhian liom go lonrófá "And I wanted you to shine"
Mairfidh tú i measc na réaltaí "You will live among stars"
Agus beidh a fhios agam go bhfuil tú ann "And I will know you are there"
Agus an spéir a thug dídean dhuit "And the sky that gave you shelter"
Beidh sí i mo chroí go deo "Will be forever in my heart"

Works for me.

Does any one else have a preference between solas and soilse?

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Múinteoir Gaeilge - Irish Teacher
My "specialty" is Connemara Irish, particularly Cois Fhairrge dialect, but I can also speak Ulster and Munster Irish with native-level pronunciation.
Is fearr Gaeilge ḃriste ná Béarla cliste, cinnte, aċ i ḃfad níos fearr aríst í Gaeilge ḃinn ḃeo na nGaeltaċtaí.
Gaeilge Chonnacht (GC), go háraid Gaeilge Chois Fhairrge (GCF), Gaeilic Uladh (GU), Gaelainn na Mumhan (GM), agus Gaeilge an Chaighdeáin Oifigiúil (CO).

mo sholas?

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Dhera, cinnte.

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Múinteoir Gaeilge - Irish Teacher
My "specialty" is Connemara Irish, particularly Cois Fhairrge dialect, but I can also speak Ulster and Munster Irish with native-level pronunciation.
Is fearr Gaeilge ḃriste ná Béarla cliste, cinnte, aċ i ḃfad níos fearr aríst í Gaeilge ḃinn ḃeo na nGaeltaċtaí.
Gaeilge Chonnacht (GC), go háraid Gaeilge Chois Fhairrge (GCF), Gaeilic Uladh (GU), Gaelainn na Mumhan (GM), agus Gaeilge an Chaighdeáin Oifigiúil (CO).

Thank you all. It's really beautiful in this language.