I was talking to some people on boards.ie and they recommended talking to the Irish language forum. So here is my question. I am doing an important project with some Irish interwoven in it. I would love if someone could help me and make sure my translations are correct as my Irish is not as good as I wish it was. If anyone could help it would be greatly appreciated. They are just two sentences. I have them in English and Irish. Could someone please check and see if they are correct or even suggest changes. If it works out and I get published, I will mention the Forum in my acknowledgement.
‘Oh, deithe na spéire treoir dom trí go sábháilte agus an turas a dhéanamh, sábháilte sa bhaile, go raibh maith agat. Oh gods of the sky guide me through safely and make the journey home safe, thanks’.

‘A Seanda Dia linn go dté tu slán agus súil a choinneáil ar anam. Go raibh maith agat. My Ancients, bless us with a safe journey and keep our souls safe. Thanks’

Any and all help greatly appreciated

Can I suggest a new important project for you? Learning Irish, from the beginning?

Hi Patrick,Thank you for the help it was greatly appreciated.(sarcasm)
I have my book almost ready to go to my agent. I need to refine my Irish sentences. I do not have time to go back and learn Irish presently. Thank you for the suggestion, but I didn't think the sentences I wrote were that bad.
In the book there are two sentences in Irish: the two given. and a few words spattered here and there. (e,g, Light (solas), and I am ( is mise)) I'm really genuinely looking for help. Could you recommend someone who could if you find this a less then worthy project.
Thanks

Buí, fáilte go ILF.
Seriously patrickjwalsh, what is the point of a comment like that? If you can help someone, please do it. If you cannot, please do not give such an awful first impression to someone of our forum. We welcome people with all levels of Irish and none to ILF. We invite all questions which are relevant to Irish and Buí's questions were both relevant and polite.

Buí, the forum is a little quiet at the moment as some members are on holiday, but someone will be along to help you with the translations you need. I am sorry about the first response you received, it is not how we usually do business around here. Saoirse.

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Thank you Insect Overlord for your nice comments and to Gumbi too for the referral.



That's a bit of a tough one.
This is just a suggestion and not directly translated.



Oh gods of the sky guide me through safely and make the journey home safe, thanks

A dheithe na spéire treoiraigh mé thríd an turas agus abhaile sábháilte, go raibh maith agaibh.



My Ancients, bless us with a safe journey and keep our souls safe. Thanks

A mhuintir ársa, beannaigh muid le turas sábháilte agus cúmhdaigh ár n-anamacha slán sábháilte. Go raibh maith agaibh.
OR
A mhuintir ársa, tabhair dúinn bhur mbeannacht agus coinnigh ár n-anamacha sábháilte ar an mbealach (abhaile). Go raibh maith agaibh.

Definitely wait for confirmations and other suggestions.

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It is recommended that you always wait for three to agree on a translation.
I speak Connemara Irish, and my input will often reflect that.
I will do an mp3 file on request for short translations.
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Bríd knows a hundred times more Irish than I ever will, so it's with great trepidation that I make a suggestion. Since the requests are being made of the gods [plural] and the ancients [plural], would these changes be appropriate?

A dheithe na spéire treoraígí mé thríd an turas agus abhaile sábháilte, go raibh maith agaibh.
[corrected per Braoin's note in a later post]

and, unless muinitir is treated as a collective noun (in which case, ignore these next two):

A mhuintir ársa, beannaígí muid le turas sábháilte agus cúmhdaigh ár n-anamacha slán sábháilte. Go raibh maith agaibh.
A mhuintir ársa, tugaigí dúinn bhur mbeannacht agus coinnigh ár n-anamacha sábháilte ar an mbealach (abhaile). Go raibh maith agaibh.

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I'm not a native (or entirely fluent) speaker, so be sure to wait for confirmations/corrections, especially for tattoos.

Caoimhín your Irish is very good. You know my spelling mistakes are famous.


Welcome to ILF Buí (And I agree with Saoirse too).

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It is recommended that you always wait for three to agree on a translation.
I speak Connemara Irish, and my input will often reflect that.
I will do an mp3 file on request for short translations.
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Perhaps the plural imperative -(a)igí/(a)ígí could be used instead of the singular imperative, Bríd, since this is addressed to "gods" rather than a god (though that might be less common in colloquial Irish):

A dheithe na spéire, treoraígí mé thríd an turas agus abhaile sábháilte, go raibh maith agaibh.

A mhuintir ársa, beannaígí muid le turas sábháilte agus cúmhdaígí ár n-anam† slán sábháilte. Go raibh maith agaibh.
OR
A mhuintir ársa, tabharaigí/tugaigí dúinn bhur mbeannacht agus coinnígí ár n-anam† sábháilte ar an mbealach (abhaile). Go raibh maith agaibh.


†Applying the "one nose in Ireland" rule, I would suggest that ár n-anam is more idiomatic than ár n-anamacha, but it is a bit of an "either/or" thing, i.e., both are correct.

(Crossed with Caoimhín)

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My "specialty" is Connemara Irish, particularly Cois Fhairrge dialect, but I can also speak Ulster and Munster Irish with native-level pronunciation.
Is fearr Gaeilge ḃriste ná Béarla cliste, cinnte, aċ i ḃfad níos fearr aríst í Gaeilge ḃinn ḃeo na nGaeltaċtaí.
Gaeilge Chonnacht (GC), go háraid Gaeilge Chois Fhairrge (GCF), Gaeilic Uladh (GU), Gaelainn na Mumhan (GM), agus Gaeilge an Chaighdeáin Oifigiúil (CO).

Hi Buí you are very welcome to the forum. Your translations are not to bad but need work.

'Oh gods of the sky guide me through safely and make the journey home safe, thanks’

A dhéithe na spéire, go dtreoirí sibh tríd an gcruachás go sabháilte mé agus go mbronnaí (sibh) sabháilteacht ar mo thuras abhaile dom; go raibh maith agaibh

Oh Gods of the sky, may ye guide me through my hardship safely and may ye grant safety upon my journey home; thank ye

Through what exactly?

or if through doesn't really mean anything:

A dhéithe na spéire, go dtreoirí sibh tríd an turas seo abhaile go sabháilte mé; go raibh maith agaibh

or different word order:

A dhéithe na spéire, go dtreoirí sibh mé go sabháilte tríd an turas seo abhaile; go raibh maith agaibh

Oh Gods of the sky, may ye guide me safely through this journey home; thank ye*

*ye, being the Hiberno-English plural form of "you"

'My Ancients, bless us with a safe journey and keep our souls safe. Thanks’

I am not sure what you mean by "ancients" here? What about my ancestors?

A shinseara, go mbeannaí sibh turas sabháilte orainn agus go gcoimeádaí (sibh) ár n-anamacha sabháilte leis; go raibh maith agaibh

My ancestors, may ye bless us with a safe journey and may ye keep our souls safe; thanks

You could of course use the Modh Ordaitheach instead of the Modh foshuiteach láithreach for these as well.

Wait for some more input!

Crossed with Bríd, Caoimhín agus Breandán

Cian

edited to fix typo on go dtreoirí, edited to fix spéire

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Go dtreoirí right? Also, Munster would make it tríd an dturas right?

The rest looks really good

Oh, and this is a very minor point, but the position of mé in this I would change

A dhéithe na spéíre, go dtreoirí sibh mé go sabháilte tríd an turas seo abhaile; go raibh maith agaibh

to "go sábháilte mé..."

Thoughts?